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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar charts illustrate the
percentage
 of
computer
ownership
 in relationship
with
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 population yearly from 2002 to 2010 and the education
level
 in 2002 and 2010.
It is clear that
 the
ownership
 had steadily increased over the years. In 2002, only slightly over half of
population
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the population
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 owned
computer
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computers
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;
however
, over
three-fourth
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three-fourths
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 of
population
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the population
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 owned
computer
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computers
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 by 2010. The analysis data of the education
level
 shows
the
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a
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 higher
level
 of education
leads
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led
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 to
the
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a
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 higher
level
 of
computer
ownership
 in both 2002 and 2010. Only around 15% of those who did not have
high
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a high
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 school diploma owned
computer
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a computer
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 in 2002 but
this
percentage
 had trebled by 2010. The
percentage
also
 increases by 30% approximately for those who did not finish
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a collage
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collage
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college
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 degree and only have
high
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a high
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 school diploma.
Furthermore
, people who have bachelor’s and postgraduate degrees proved to have
greatest
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the greatest
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percentage
 of
computer
ownership
 in 2010, at 90% and 95%, about 20% higher than in 2002.
Computer
ownership
 has
a
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had a
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substantial increase in the past decade across all educational levels.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, computer, ownership, level with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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