The maps below show an Industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

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The two pictures compare the current industrial area of a city with a plan to develop the same

site

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. We can see that the

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developed proposal involves making a number of changes to the

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; mainly in the central area. There are no plans to rebuild the

factories

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in the proposed plan.The most noticeable change from the existing to the proposed

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plan is that there will no longer be

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factories

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when the construction has been done.

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will be achieved by replacing the

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with more accommodation sites.

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, the proposed square road will become wider by adding some small roads, facilitating

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access to

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specific areas.To remove the current

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, a new school will be constructed

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of the square. Some other facilities including

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center

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, playground

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and shopping malls will

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be added around the square.

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, the planned

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work will

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include a special road over the river to reach the housing areas and farmland.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words site, factories with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

166 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

industrial area
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infrastructure
manufacturing
facilities
transition
planning
commercial
residential
renovation
urban planning
sustainability
environmental impact
local economy
rejuvenation
construction
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The maps below show an Industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

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