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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #expenditure #three #categories #age #groups #residents #uk #summaries #information #features #comparisons
The figure gives
informations
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information
pieces of information
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the
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on the
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precentage
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percentage
 of British for spending
their
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apply
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money on
the
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apply
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food
 and
drink
, restaurant and hotel, and
food
 and
drink
 within
group
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the group
a group
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 of ages in the UK in 2004.
Overall
, the most expenditure categories
was
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were
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 allocated by
elderly
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the elderly
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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for entertainment, and
food
 and
drink
. Meanwhile, the lowest item that they paid is
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and
hotel
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hotels
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.
Food
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The food
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 and
drink
 area and entertainment budget
was
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were
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 the highest expenditures in
61
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the 61
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-75 years old group,
while
food
 and
drink
was
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were
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 consumed by
over
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the over
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 76 years old group, and each of them contributes
at
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apply
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23%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drink with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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