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Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behaviour? Provide examples for your opinion.

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Recent studies
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 demonstrated the fact there
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 always more
people
 that research for other countries to live in. Nowadays,
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 internet diffusion and the increment of
possibiliries
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possibilities
 and chances, there are a lot of
people
 who try to change their conditions. First of all, I think that
people
 move from their reality to escape from poor conditions, in
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 these days it is possible to find opportunities in different countries which offer better scenarios.
For example
,
people
 could move to concur for a better job and conditions related to that. In the same way, others try to find abroad
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 state regulations.
For instance
, some workers moved from Italy because of the taxation that nowadays is around 22
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 and very
law
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 salaries.
Hence
,
this
 phenomenon is called "escaping brains" and it includes a wide number of
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 graduates
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and young
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workes
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workers
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. - stati sempre più poveri di competenze tecniche e scientifiche + Regarding the outcomes, I think
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