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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the consumption of people in the UK on food and drink, restaurant and hotel,
as well as
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 entertainment for various ages in the UK in 2004.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the bar chart that the amount of public interest in food and drink went up gradually as the increases of ages,
while
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 the other categories have a fluctuation trend among all life groups. Commencing, the young crowd who have age under 30
years
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 old that spend their money on meals and beverages was at nearly 5%. It was a gradual increase in every age group and reached a plateau of around 23% for people 76
years
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 old and above.
Similarly
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, citizens that expenditure their money in terms of entertainment rose significantly and reached a peak in the ages group 71-75
years
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 old at 23% before dropping to just below 15% in the community 76
years
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 old and above.
On the other hand
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, the total spending on restaurants and hotels has the highest value in people under 30
years
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 old accounting for 14%.
Subsequently
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, it went down slightly in citizens in age 31-45
years
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 old and remained the same in value with the crowd around 46-60
years
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 old at just above 10%.
Moreover
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, it was plummet in society aged 61-75
years
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 old at just below 5% before going up in community 76
years
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 old and above around 6%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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