You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart shows the amount of money spent in the UK in 2004 for
food
and beverage, restaurant and hotel and entertainment. These details are grouped by age groups of local
people
.
Overall
, the preferences change depending on age and expenditures depend on age as well.
Food
and drink is the cluster where
people
used to spend more, exceptionally for under 30 citizens. In fact,
people
who were older than 31
years
old spent more than 10% of their money on meals and beverages. Entertainment reached the second position in the ranking,
hence
people
who were over 46
years
old spent a medium of 15% of the total expenditures.
Restaurants
and
hotels
used to be preferred by young individuals, because they paid around 15% of the total. It could be inferred from the graph that the preferences changed over the
years
.
People
around 30 and 40
years
old used to spend more in
restaurants
and
hotels
compared to
over
Correct pronoun usage
those over
show examples
60 citizens,
hence
the percentage is lower than 5%.
People
between 31 and 60
years
had the same habits, in
fact
Add a comma
,fact
show examples
the values were quite similar for
restaurants
,
hotels
and drinks and
food
. In the same way,
also
over 61
years
Add a comma
,years
show examples
people
followed the same choices, they invest more money in
food
and drink and almost anything in
restaurants
and
hotels
indeed.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "hence".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, years, restaurants, hotels with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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