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"Science and technology has made people's life easy." Do you agree or disagree?

#science #technology #people #life
In the
Beginning
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 Science already exist,
started
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starting
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 from
big
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the big
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 bang theory and creation divided
in to
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into
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era
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eras
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according to
 geologic time.
Thru
 different fossils,Some
scientist
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scientists
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 predict that man came from animals
witch
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which
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 we call now
evolution
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the evolution
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 of homospience other
scientist
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scientists
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 said
man
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the man
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 started from plants,
other
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and other
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 scientist telling that we came from
atom
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an atom
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then
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and then
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 revolve
to
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around
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a
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apply
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matter...Using
a
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apply
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new
technology
 people study
the
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apply
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different life
cyle
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cycle
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.
Therefore
,Science is a systematic
endeavor
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endeavour
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 that builds and organizes in the form of testable
explanation
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explanations
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 and
prediction
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predictions
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 about the universe.It made
people
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people's
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 life easy because
a
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apply
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modern
technology
help
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helps
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 us to make life attainable.New
technology
 was invented
for example
 at
hospital
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hospitals
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 Doctors do surgeries using their hands and some hemostats,
now
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and now
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technology
 was
up graded
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upgraded
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thru
advance
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advanced
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machines they are using to do a
presice
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precise
 and sensitive operation.
Other examples
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some
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are some
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 hybrid
car
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cars
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this
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which
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are
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is
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 operated by
machine
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machines
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this
tecnology
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technology
 helps to be
lesser
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a lesser
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accident
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accidents
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 and miss
calculation
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calculations
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 on the road less traffic save more fuel,money and
ontime
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time
 arrived at the working place.One thing more some
machine
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machines
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 used to run in different factory outlet to do some manufacturing like cutting,
shapping
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shaping
shopping
shipping
 and packing,
this
technology
 helps to do and finish hard and heavy jobs.when it comes
on
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to
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 farming at rice fields we plant rice seedlings before it
take
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takes
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 2 weeks, First need to
cultive
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cultivate
then
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them then
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 water once
its
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it's
it is
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 ready we need to call a
laborer
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labourer
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for
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to
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 help plant
seedlings
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the seedlings
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,now
thru
 the help of
technology
 we can use a tractor to cultivate,plant and harvest. I agree that science and
technology
 made a big role in our daily living
thru
this
 we can save time and effort were doing more
productive
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products
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to
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for
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 consumers.
On the
contrary
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i
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I
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 disagree,
becuase
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because
 it will cause
a jobless opportunities
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jobless opportunities
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 for
other
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others
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 maybe hiring will be lesser some netizens will suffer from hunger and
proverty
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poverty
.
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