Many people that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect of others.What maighy have caused this situation.How to improve it?

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days, it is common for people to become more anti-social and
disrespect
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for
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others
. There are some reasons
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phenomenon. In
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essay, I will highlight the causes of the issue and solution to address it First of all, there are two main reasons why people start isolating and lack
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respect
of
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others
.
Firstly
, citizens have busy
work
schedules. More specifically, they spend most of their time doing
work
and even frequently
work
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weekend shifts.
This
would prevent them from having conversations with
others
and enjoying their life. The lack of quality time with
others
is studied to cause various mental disorders
such
as depression or isolation.
Secondly
, youngsters now are exposed to a significant amount of media, including
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games, television and internet-spread news. Because excessive amounts of time engaged in virtual worlds or consuming can lead to a decrease in social interactions and physical activities.
As a result
, people become isolated and
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with
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others
.
However
,
this
trend might
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by several solutions. The first solution is that government should
work
closely with the local community to
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the causes of anti-social behaviour. After finding these, they need
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a campaign to raise awareness
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importance of social activities and encourage citizens to participate in community clubs. The second one is that with anti-social residents, they should resettle and support
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them.
This
help
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them easily reintegrate into the community and prevent
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having
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in the future. In conclusion, isolated behaviour and lack respect of
others
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are caused by busy
work
and media. These would solve by launching a campaign and
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from
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