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In many places, new houses are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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Housing has always been a problem in many places which require new
houses
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. The only space ,
however
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, available for building is in the
countryside
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, even though some
people
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 think that it is important to preserve the
countryside
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 which has
a
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the
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 potential for
future
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 living areas. Personally, I always share the same idea of protecting
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countryside
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the countryside
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 for the next generation. There are always places for new
houses
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 in the centre of the city. Preserving the habitat of the
countryside
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important
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 for
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society, and
next
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the next
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 generations
which
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who
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 have a right to decide for the
countriside's
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countryside's
countryside
future
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. These areas provide fresh air,
the
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 green
environment
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, and
ourdoor
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outdoor
 spaces for the community. They can spend their spare time
at
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there if they want in the
future
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 or now. Many households, especially with children, are visiting the
countryside
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 at weekends as a family activity.
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 the elderly,
for example
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, do not have lots of alternatives rather than the
countryside
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 for walking peacefully, and I
belive
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believe
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 these places should be protected for
people
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 who want to spend their precious time
at
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in
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 natural habitats. Despite the fact that the
countryside
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 has a special nature, the increased demand
on
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 housing is a serious issue for the community. The solution ,
on the other hand
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, should be considered for other alternatives, not for the
countryside
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. If new
houses
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 are built there, the
environment
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 will be destructed easily. Not only can it causes damage the
environment
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, but
also
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 restricts individuals' free time activities. Other alternatives
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 as higher
apartmants
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apartments
 or underground
houses
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 may lead to
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protecting
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 the
environment
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 in the
future
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. I believe these options can protect the
countryside
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 from now to
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future
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the future
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. In conclusion, new
houses
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 are needed in many areas, but there is no space to build them in the centre of the city. Some
people
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 think that it is more important to preserve the
countryside
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 rather than to provide new buildings for housing. From my point of view,
people
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 should protect the
countryside
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 which provides a natural habitat for the community and their outdoor activities.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • housing shortage
  • preserving
  • natural habitats
  • biodiversity
  • responsible
  • sustainable development
  • government policies
  • urban development
  • alternative housing options
  • renovating
  • repurposing
  • unused spaces
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