Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourages business to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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some think that urban
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comfortable place for civilized nations. In my opinion, I think that rural
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with any disadvantages it might bring. Despite the drawbacks below, I believe people could gain more benefits
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in rural
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, air, water and noise pollution is low
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of plants, factories, vehicles and even
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do not suffer from any kind of pollution.
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, the quality of food is better than in big cities as they are raised without any additives or pesticides. Living outside of cities, people could be more healthy as it is supposed to have active
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doing many kinds of work manually
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of sitting in
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style of
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. Admittedly, there are some disadvantages involved living in rural
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. One of them is
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choice of jobs
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be offered
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shortage
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of plants and factories. Another negative aspect is degradation
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quantity of schools and teaching personnel.
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, big cities with their signs are more attractive
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tourists’ curiosity, so if rural
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do not have
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kinds of attractions they will not be interested to visit those locations. In conclusion, having ecological environment conditions including clear air, healthy food and active
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far outweighs any of the minor drawbacks that could result from moving to the rural
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic diversification
  • infrastructure strain
  • rural character
  • urban decongestion
  • environmental impact
  • economic stimulation
  • logistical challenges
  • commuting
  • work-life balance
  • cultural clashes
  • habitat destruction
  • rural depopulation
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