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The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart and table depict information divided between both models
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, one about what the Anthropology
students
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 made after finishing their course and another about the salary earned by them five years after respectively.
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 it can be seen that almost half of the
students
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 were destinated to full- time
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,
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 the lowest number of
students
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 decided to do
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part-time
work
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 + postgrad study.
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, the most paid category presented in the table was freelance consultants.
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, most of the half part of Anthropology
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 chose to
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full-time
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 company, accounting for 52 per
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,
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 15 per
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 decide to
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 in a part-time environment.
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, only 12 per
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 of the
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 became unemployed after finishing their degree. When it comes to salary,
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 higher amount of salary is paid to freelance consultants, comprehending more than $100,000 of money for 40 per
cent
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 of
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this
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 workers.
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, the lowest-paid job is represented by private companies,
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for which
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 10 per
cent
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 of their employers receive between $25,000 and
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apply
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49,999.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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