The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010
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The bar chart illustrated the percentage-wise of Australian males and females in different age groups who were doing daily physical exercises in the year 2010.
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, both gender experienced a downward trend throughout the
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.Meanwhile, they had some fluctuations over the
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, women generally did more physical activity than men. Between 15 to 24 males made up 52.8% and had a significant decline in the following age groups. 25 to 54 age men rate stayed relatively stable between 42.2% and 43.1%. After 54 years old, it increased steadily by 3.6% to 46.7% of males 65 and over. At the beginning of the
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, Females account for 47.7% and rose gradually to 52.5% between the ages of 15 to 44. 35 to 64 years old, women's rate stayed stable between 52.5% and 53%.
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, in the following ,
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it decreased dramatically by 6.3 % to 47.1% and outraced the men's rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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