The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table provides the proportion of the
time
spending
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spent
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of
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by
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the
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unemployed people in
UK
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the UK
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in
last
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year. We can see that
men
spent
time
gardening, decorating, walking, drinking and playing sport more than
women
whereas
women
cared about housework, shopping and visiting friends or town. In
morning
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the morning
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,
men
mainly did job hunting which occupied about one-fourth
time
in
morning
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the morning
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.
In addition
, doing housework and shopping were
also
things that
men
usually completed before noon, proved by the fact that the proportion of
time
spent on these two tasks in
morning
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had over 10% more than that
of
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in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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.
Next,
women
spent approximately half of their morning on housework.
On the other hand
, they preferred to visit friends, watch television and read in
afternoon
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an afternoon
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, all of the percentages are at least 5% more in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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than in
morning
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the morning
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.
Finally
, the rate of staying in bed in
morning
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the morning
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was the same, 8%, for
men
and
women
. It is interesting to note that
men
and
women
both spent much
time
on job hunting, which took over 30%
for
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men
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men's
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and
women
’s whole day.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, men, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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