A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts say how you think the company should spend the money Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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the general public about the topic of spending a certain amount of money either to support our local children's

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or to organize two open-air concerts.

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still needs too much money to reach the high levels

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and practice more and more

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more attention to both local

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and local concerts. Thanks a lot for your caring. Yours faithfully, Adam White

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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