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The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kinds of crimes that occurred in Newport City center between 2003 and 2012.
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The chart demonstrates the
differant
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different
 types of
crimes
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 ( Burglary,
car
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theft
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,Robbery ) in New Port city
center
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 from 2003- 2012.
Overall
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 the numbers of burglary and
car
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theft
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crimes
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 decreased
,
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while
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 stealing from people
crimes
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 were almost the same over those years. In 2003, the highest rate of
crimes
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were
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 breaking into buildings to steal the residents at almost 3500 cases. Those cases decreased dramatically in 2007, reaching 1250
incidants
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incidents
 in 2012. Comparing
this
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 to
car
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theft
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, which accounted for 2750 cases in 2003 and fluctuated to reach just below 2500 thefts in 2012. Between the
peroid
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period
 ( 2007 to 2012 )
car
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theft
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 was the commonest source of crime in New Port city
center
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, rest of
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theft
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the theft
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 rates were much lower. Robbery figures were the least among all methods of stealing and stayed
in
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 an average of 650 all over the
9 year
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9-year
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peroid
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period
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crimes, car, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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