The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

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The first graph provides information about females and males living in a state taking part in four house duties. The second one illustrates the average period spent by each sex on each one of these jobs.

Overall

, it is obvious that a high percentage of women carry out cleaning and cooking compared with the other two tasks ,

also

the percentage of women who do these jobs and the time spent on it, exceed the other gender. The first chart demonstrates that 80% of girls prepare the meals

while

60 % of boys do that. Cleaning was another thing in which women showed superiority over their partners. Meanwhile

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men displayed carefulness in the home for animals more than females. Home repairing was another task in which men showed superiority. The second table provides us with critical knowledge. Most of the household tasks times were used in cooking and cleaning by both genders with a little bit of male inferiority.pet care times were equally distributed between both sexes

in contrast

house repair times men took the distinction .

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