The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar and line chart below shows average monthly temperatures and bathing suit sales in New York for the first 6 months of 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graphs
shows
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show
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temperature and the bar chart revenue from bathing suit sales in new york city during the
firsts
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months of the year 2012. Looking from an
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perspective, it is readily apparent that April is when more money is made from selling swimsuits and the more people buy swimsuits in winter and spring. As
illustrate
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in the line graphs the temperature increases over the
last
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five of six months with the peak in
june
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June
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, the temperature until 65 degrees.
As
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contrast, the bar chart demonstrated that the revenue
tend
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to
decreases
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during the peak of the summer.
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,
,
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we can see that the
selling
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sales
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of swimsuits
grow
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up in the winter and spring,
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and the
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numbers started to rise in
february
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February
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. From February to March the amount went
of
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150 to approximately 200
dolares
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dollars
and in
the
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apply
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April reach
the
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peak of 250.
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, is possible
see
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to see
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that the numbers of
purchase
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purchases
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drastically fall in
the
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apply
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june
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June
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperatures
  • bathing suit sales
  • correlation
  • monthly breakdown
  • significant changes
  • warmest months
  • speculate
  • trends
  • increase in temperature
  • contrasting
  • predictive speculation
  • general trends
  • specific months
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