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some people say that mobile phones should not be allowed in public places, others argue that people should be free to use their mobiles whenever they like. discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #phones #places #mobiles
In
this
 digital era, mobile
phones
 are a major necessity for everyone. A group of people believes in Public areas using of
phones
 should be prohibited,
while
 some modernists claim, every individual should be authorized to operate their mobile
phones
according to
 their wish. In my opinion,
free to use
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free-to-use
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 gadgets will help capture special moments with the family and people can use
it
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them
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while
 an emergency. To commence with, Mobile Phone is the second most part of each person. Every individual spends around 10 hours in a public area
,
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apply
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if
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and if
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 suddenly
any
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an
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 accident occurs on the road, the mobile phone will be used to call an ambulance.
Moreover
, In public parks,
play
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and play
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 areas parents spend time with their upbringings, where
mobile
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the mobile
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 phone is the most comfortable tool to capture photos and record videos.
Additionally
, in
the
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 city like Bangalore people now mostly prefer online payment rather than cash exchange, to buy even a small thing digital applications are used.
Therefore
, using
of
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apply
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mobile
phones
 will never be prohibited.
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