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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities around the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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The
population
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 of
car
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 owners has increased speedily within thirty years and
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 has been a steady cause of
traffic
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 jams
over
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many cities of the
world
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.
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 is an occurrence happening all around us and can be amended if the government mandates the introduction of public transport into our cities and an increase
of
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taxes paid on private
cars
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. Generally, getting to a destination has now become a heavy task because of the longer period it would take, as
every one
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is driving,
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 causing
traffic
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 jams and increased time
is
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being taken to reach a destination.
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, I had an urgent meeting scheduled for 7am
last
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 week Thursday and could not meet up despite leaving home at 5am for a journey that would have taken just thirty minutes.
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, all of these can be solved with the introduction of
public
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 transport system in cities all around the
world
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 by the government, if they mandate the
population
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 to use public transport rather than their private
cars
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,
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 will limit the number of private
cars
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 owned by individuals as they would become of no use and
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 reduce the volume of
cars
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 on the road making movement easier. It has become easy for many people to buy
cars
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 because the
tax
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 paid on
it
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 is quite negligible.
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, they can put a high charge per earning as a
tax
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 on every
car
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 owned by an individual.
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 in Turkey, every
car
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 owner must pay one thousand dollars every three months as a
tax
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 on their
cars
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, with
this
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 the amounts of
cars
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 used reduced from 50% to 35% of the
population
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 within a year.
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 is a very effective means of discouraging the
population
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 and
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 a solution to the constant
traffic
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 jam experienced all over the
world
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. In conclusion,
traffic
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 jam has become a serious issue all over the
world
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 and the government can discourage the people by mandating public means of transportation and a
tax
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 charge on every private
car
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.

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