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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart depicts information about the divergent types of
water
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 used between the world's continents.
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 it can be seen that in most parts of the
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world
water
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 is used for agricultural
purpose
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purposes
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. We can
also
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 see that the lowest percentage is destinated for domestic use.
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, continents
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 as Africa, Central Asia and Southwest Asia show a
significant
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 higher percentage of
water
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 used for agricultural maintenance, accounting for more than 80% in these places,
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 in Europe the same use of
water
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 is lower, comprehending just 32%.
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, North America and Europe present both the highest amount of
water
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 used for Industrial means, being responsible for 48% and 53% respectively.
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, South America is responsible for the highest percentage of
water
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 used domestically, accounting for 19%. To summarize, it is possible to confirm that in all the six continents the less used destination of
water
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 is inside houses.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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