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Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places. Do you think thers are more advantages or disadvantages to visiting new places?

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It is true that most
of
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people are into travel to new and exotic
places
instead
 of
known
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the known
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one
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ones
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.
While
 there
some
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 disadvantages to that point,I believe that it is a good change for the better. There are some reasons why going to different
places
 can be
unfovourable
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unfavourable
. First of all, visitors may tend to forget about their familiar
places
, their own tradition and heritage which are in former
places
.
Secondly
, there are accessibility issues.
For instance
, the people who visit a site that was surrounded by mountains and woods have a poor mobile poor connection,let alone internet access. Despite these drawbacks,I feel that journeying through foreign countries is one of the best
way
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ways
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 to broaden
tourist's
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a tourist's
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horizon
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. The main reason why
this
 is extremely helpful it offers to gain more knowledge of that country,
explore
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and explore
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 various cultures and modern
lifesyle
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lifestyle
lifestyles
. Evidently, every tourist tries
tradition
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 foods.
This
 is because, the range and quality of food - one of the most defining
aspect
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aspects
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 of any culture. In conclusion, any individual who pays a visit somewhere new can take advantage of that. I do believe that
upsides
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the upsides
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 overweight any of the drawbacks.
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