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Because of the global economy many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance to what extent do the adantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#economy #goods #basics #countries #distance #adantages
Now we live in a life
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which is everything
avaible
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available
in
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everywhere.
Goods
 which
is
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are
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 necessary for our daily life is
trasported
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transported
 from
other country
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another country
other countries
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 to another
for
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over
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 a long distance.In my view
benefits
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the benefits
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 outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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. On the positive side if
goods
 transport
for
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to
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 countries all over the world we will have
possibluties
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possibilities
 to taste different types of fruits.
For example
last
 year we had
not
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no
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chance
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a chance
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 to partake
mango
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in mango
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 or
marakuya
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maracuja
 but now you can find them everywhere.
In
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other
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the other
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side
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 we did not try any popular brands like Gucci or Dior.But now they filled in every store.You know everything is not
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about
anout
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about
 fruits or brands,we have chances
try
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 everything in lots of ways
Furthermore
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 now many
pople
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people
 have
function
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a function
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 in small businesses. Kind of exporting things help make
relationship
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the relationship
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 between them.
Also
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 it
lead
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leads
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well-being
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to well-being
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 in every country.You know
economy
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the economy
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 is
essential
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an essential
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 topic in our lifestyle.
This
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also
 does not immune if we
comincate
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communicate
 with each other.
Then
 there will be
less
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fewer
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 conflicts between us. On the downside, transporting
goods
 can lead disappearance of our
cultire
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culture
.We can take
foods
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food
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for example
.
In these
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 days exported meals
more
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are more
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 popular than traditional ones.Everyone wants to try new
kind
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kinds
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 of foods.It already became our habit to eat foreign meals.Another downside is pollution.
Convey
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 things in
air
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the air
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 or
water way
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waterway
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 contribute
contamination
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.It has lots of effects
for
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on
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 our life. To
coclude
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conclude
,importing
goods
 has
also
 cons,but
like
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as
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i
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 mentioned merit outweigh demerits.
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