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Traffic congession of your city. Causes and action of tackle it.

#traffic #congession #city #action
Traffic congestion has become one of the major problems
of
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 each city nowadays. It is increasing rapidly which is out of control.
We
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 community are responsible too. So
i
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 will discuss the reasons for traffic jams and some initiatives which can be taken by the common nation and the government. There are several causes of traffic and the primary issue is overpopulation. society
are
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 moving from here to there and creating a crowd. Because of
this
reason
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 vehicles cannot move easily.
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 roads are not wide and transport
are
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 standing in the middle of the expressway and taking passengers. On the other ,hand every single artery is connected to the capital of the city. There are no inter-connected roads so
that
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people have to cross the main city first if they want to go to another town. There are lots of institutions, hospitals and offices located beside
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the lane and make mass every day. As we all know our public transportations are not comfortable and safe. So
population
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 are using their own cars which
also
making
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 bundles of cars running on the road. The administration should focus on it and fix a particular time for vehicles. If authorities take all the solutions at the proper time
then
 the problem can be tackled.
Moreover
, everything should be affordable too.
Submitted by Md. Anwar Hossain on

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