You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The given line graph illustrates the correlation between
age
and crime
rate, while
the pie chart provides information about different sorts of crime
in the USA for the last
year. Overall
, those who are from 16 years
old to 24 years
old tended to commit crime
, while
violent crime
was the most predominant crime
in the UK.
As can be seen clearly from the graph and the chart, there were no cases of crime
recorded from 0 to 8 years
old. The starting age
of crime
commitment was early - 8 years
old. The people who were 28 years
old tended to commit the crime
less. The percentage of this
decreased from 20% to lower 10%. The crime
rate reached its peach at the age
of 20. The percentage of crime
commitment from the age
of 12 to the age
of 16 soared dramatically - This
percentage was more than 10 times than the starting point, followed by a steady decrease to 10% for 60 years
old.
Violent misdeed accounts for almost half of the total cases in the UK. On the contrary
, The proportion for property crime
and drug crime
were roughly similar at 23% and 22% respectively. Finally
, public order crime
was the least prevalent crime
at 9%.Submitted by thuhuyen16992qn on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, crime, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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