Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behavior and lack of respect for others.What might have caused this situation ? How to improve it?

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into a global village. Everyone is related to
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result have no time for family and friends .
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should be set up to connect humans to others. Summing up, the
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behaviour and joint lack of respect in today's time can be dealt with by taking simple measures and government should collectively take these steps
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  • diminished
  • empathy
  • individualism
  • self-centered
  • economic pressures
  • competitive nature
  • manifest
  • traditional moral values
  • aggressive content
  • anonymity
  • consequences
  • character education
  • social and emotional learning
  • community-based programs
  • ethical teachings
  • socio-economic contributors
  • regulating
  • promotes
  • discourages
  • foster
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