The process diagram give illustration on the stages involved in the production of dairy and its varieties. Overall, there are 8 different stages in the production of milk. The first few steps takes place in the farm while the last steps are done in the factory. To begin with, Grazing occurs in the farm, It is harvesting by animal instead of by machines. It provides good nutrition and other benefits to the animal. Milk is extracted from the cows by milk machine and the milk is refrigerated. Milk is transferred into milk tanker and milk is delivered daily to the diary. Furthermore, Diary milk is pasteurized and packaged in form of cheese, butter and cream. They are distributed in supermarkets, shops and stores for human consumption. In addition, grazing occurs in the farm and extraction of milk by the milking machine, milk pasteurization and packaging process is done in the factory, and then distributed to shops.

The process diagram give illustration on the stages involved in the production of dairy and its varieties.

Overall, there are 8 different stages in the production of milk. The first few steps takes place in the farm while the last steps are done in the factory.

To begin with, Grazing occurs in the farm, It is harvesting by animal instead of by machines.  It provides good nutrition and other benefits to the animal. Milk is extracted from the cows by milk machine and the milk is refrigerated. Milk is transferred into milk tanker and milk is delivered daily to the diary.

Furthermore, Diary milk is pasteurized and packaged in form of cheese, butter and cream. They are distributed in supermarkets, shops and stores for human consumption.

In addition, grazing occurs in the farm and extraction of milk by the milking machine, milk pasteurization and packaging process is done in the factory, and then distributed to shops.
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the stages involved in the production of dairy and its varieties.
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