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The provided process diagram presents information about the
sugar
cane
 becomes
sugar
. It can be clearly seen that; the process has seven steps which are started with
sugar
cane
 on the farm and end in the drying and cooling section.
Overall
.as can be seen in the illustration waiting for 12-18 months for growing the
sugar
cane
 after that, farmers harvest them in the second stage. consecutively in the third level
sugar
cane
 crushing ad becomes juice for the next stage. In that stage with a limestone filter prepared juice is purified. Evaporating the preparations juice by heating it is the next action which is vital to the sixth step to centrifuge it.
Finally
, the
last
 station is drying and cooling the
sugar
. Generally, the given illustration expresses the phases of producing the
sugar
 from
sugar
cane
 just from the farm to the final level in seven clear stages.
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