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Some people think that private health care is better for people. Others say that health care should be free of charge and run by the government. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of private health service. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #health #care #charge #government #service
Nowadays
People
 are earning very well as compared to the previous century. Humans can understand
there
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their
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responsibility very well now
people
 can
take
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get
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health
care
form
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from
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 private
hospital
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hospitals
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. I think
this
 is good because private
health
care
 are better to compare government, If you can see the government
has
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is
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 doing lots of work for human
also
there
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they
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 are providing lots of free facility to the
people
.
Like
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For
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 free education, and transport for old human
also
 in some cities governments provide
health
care
free
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apply
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for those person have low incomes and are now employees, but now
government
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the government
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 can't take new responsibility for
people
. I think
this
 is advantageous for private
health
 services to provide
this
 service to
people
 with
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a minum
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minum
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minimum
 charge. Private
helath
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health
care
also
put
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puts
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there
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their
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 time money or employee for
this
 service they
also
provied
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provide
provided
salary
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salaries
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 to
employee
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employees
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 for
this
 they have to take some money form to the
people
 I
thik
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think
 it will be valid but they can do
one
think form there
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thing from their
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 side they will
provied
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provide
 some facility free of cost to those
people
 who earning low or non employee person. private
helath
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health
care
 provide fabulace service to
pesint
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patients
 and they have
taking
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taken
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lost
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lots
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 of
care
to
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of
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pesient
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patients
I am
shareing
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sharing
one
 of my experience
to
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apply
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here
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where
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one
 of my relative
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was admited
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admited
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admitted
in
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to
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private
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a private
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 hospital he was in trable in hart and I was sow multiple dr or nurace was doing check
up
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on
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 my uncle and that time I was realiesed why private
helath
care
 is important.
Becouse
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Because
 they can put there all
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their efferts
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efferts
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efforts
on
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into
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 that patient
One
off
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apply
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the
mager
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major
 disadvantage of private
helath
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health
care
 is they
was
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apply
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charge
lot
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a lot
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off
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of
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 money
this
 is
one
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apply
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off
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apply
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mager think
secound
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second
 they are not taking
responibilty
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responsibility
of
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for
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patient
Add an article
the patient
a patient
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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