The two pie charts illustrate the proportions of some professions of females and males employed in UK in 1992.
The two pie charts illustrate the proportions of some professions of females and
males
employed in UK
in 1992.
The dominant part of workers in Correct article usage
the UK
males
and females which
were hired Correct pronoun usage
who
this
year was in non-manual
managerial and professional sphere. The numbers are 29 Add an article
the non-manual
percent
in females and Change the spelling
per cent
thirty six
per cent in Add a hyphen
thirty-six
males
.
Moreover
, as for famales
, clerical or other related skills were in demand as well (Correct your spelling
females
families
thirty one
per cent) Add a hyphen
thirty-one
what
can not be said about Correct pronoun usage
which
males
which
figure Correct pronoun usage
whose
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
minor
amount of Correct article usage
a minor
employement
(six per cent).Correct your spelling
employment
In addition
, the situation notes that ladies less are into manual work that
days Correct pronoun usage
these
whereas
almost one half
of gentlemen are eager to participate in manual work processes.
Add a hyphen
one-half
It is clear that
craft
or the same careers Fix the agreement mistake
crafts
more
prefered by men in comparison with what was chosen by women providing 24% and only three Add a missing verb
are more
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
accordingly
. Furthermore
, not over two per cents
chose general labourers in both genders.Fix the agreement mistake
cent
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