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Some people say that television is useful for education, while others say it is useful only for entertainment. Discus both views and give your opinion.

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Television
 is a great invention that people have nowadays. The first purpose of the invention of
television
 is to share
information
 with visual addition to the crowd. As
time
 moves,
television
 become a great medium to inform people around the world and it has had diverse usage recently,
such
 as news,
education
,
entertainment
, creative publishing, etc. In the 1960 - 1980 era, when Indonesia didn't have enough resources to spread knowledge fairly, the Indonesian government used
television
 as one of the
media
 to spread
education
 to the community, especially students. In that generation, infrastructures were not in good condition yet. The distribution of teachers and schools is still not evenly distributed. To tackle these issues, the government built regional
television
 stations to transmit the
television
 signal more evenly to isolated areas, even though only a few householders have
television
. At that
time
,
television
 was the biggest
source
 of
information
,
education
, and
entertainment
besides
 radio and newspapers.
As a result
,
television
 became the main trendsetter of that day. As
time
 changes,
television
 is not the only resource nowadays. Humans invented the
internet
 as a new origin of
information
. In line with it, the
Internet
also
 became a reliable
source
 of
education
. The
Internet
also
 evolving to make social
media
 nowadays. Social
media
 make folk around the world become more connected and make
information
 spread evenly and actually. Societies have many resources of
information
,
education
, and
entertainment
 at
this
time
.
Consequently
,
television
 is not the main
source
 of both
education
 and
entertainment
. In conclusion of
this
 discussion,
television
 was the main origin of
education
 and
entertainment
. As the world evolves, the
internet
 and social
media
 emerge as the new
source
 of
education
 and
entertainment
 and make
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
television
 the second option, or even third option,
source
 of
education
 and
entertainment
. To keep
television
 exist nowadays,
television
 stations make entertaining programs that make the crowd still enjoy the
television
.
As a consequence
, some communities say that
television
 is useful only for
entertainment
.
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