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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the community helps for free
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 the part of high school programme.
While
 I do believe that
students
 can benefit from
this
 work, I disagree with the idea of making
such
 programs compulsory. On the one hand, children
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 are studying do the unsalaried community
services
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 would help them become
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kind and pleasant persons.
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, they should frequently talk with others, which can enable the
students
 to develop
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 expression ability. These practices are different
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 the course in school, it includes a large amount of knowledge which is
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 for your whole life.
One
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 the other hand, I am so intensely disagree force
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adolescents to do the projects which we
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discussed above.
Firstly
, the services
are not have
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 any salary, but it would spend a lot of time.
However
, even one minute for teenagers is
also
rarely
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.
Secondly
, every people who are not only the teenagers all have
qualification
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 to control
the
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 life by themselves, so the schools shouldn’t regular the children to do these if they don’t want. What’s more, the works which are compelled would
making
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 the individuals loss interested to a large extent. In conclusion,
while
 I can understand the reason why the schools organize
this voluntary activities
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to
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students
, I would argue that it is unreasonable to force every
students
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 to take part in
such
 unpaid programs.
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