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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.
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The bar chart illustrates the information about the proportion of females who go into higher education in five countries (The UK, the USA, Australia, South Korea, and France) in the years 1980 and 2015. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
, it can be concluded from the given information that the percentage of women in higher education increased in the five countries.
According to
 the chart, the highest proportion of Australian women going on to study after leaving school stood steady at almost 60% in two both years
while
 South Korea had the lowest of women at around 15% and 30% in 1980 and 2015, respectively.
In addition
, the smallest change was seen in France, where the number increased by around 5%
while
 The most dramatic change was in South Korea, where the percentage doubled from 15% to 30%.
Moreover
, The UK and the USA increased
similarly
 by 20% over the period shown
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