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The graph below shows the number of vehicles owned by per thousand people in China from 1987 to 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of vehicles owned by per thousand people in China from 1987 to 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates information about
amount
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the amount
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 of
vehicles
 for every thousand
people
 from 1987 to 1999 From
Overall
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an Overall
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 perspective its readily apparent that the number of
people
 owning
vehicles
 followed
a
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an
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increase
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increasing
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 trend.with 1987 being
lowest
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the lowest
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 and 1999 being
highest
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the highest
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. In 1987 are around 250
vehicles
who
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apply
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owned
vehicles
 ,
number
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the number
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 doubling
by
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in
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next
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the next
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 two
years
. Ownership of
vehicles
 among 800
people
 between 1991 and 1995 is
same
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the same
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.
On the Other
hand
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 there is
drastic
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a drastic
the drastic
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 increase in the next
years
 with
thousand
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the thousand
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people
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of people
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increase
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increasing
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 every two
years
 ,
1995
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in 1995
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 almost double the
vehicles
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number of vehicles
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than
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apply
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that of those two
years
 back.There were 2900
people
 in 1997 and around 4100 in the year 1999.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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