Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other counties have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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economy is connected all around the world in many
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. Today, we do not belong to Earth which is a big planet. We are owned by a small global village. Each
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is accessible everywhere. When we are transporting products over a long distance, it will
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many plus
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and minus
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merit
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downside
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. On the benefit side, delivering goods
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a long distance gives us a lot of options. We can taste a variety of vegetables or fruits which are coming from all around the world.
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about ten years ago, we did not see kiwi fruit which is from New Zealand.
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, at the moment it has every fruit or every vegetable
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everywhere. Earlier, we had a few shoe brands alike Bate and Carona, but now the markets are
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of Reeboks, Nike, Adidas and other brands.
Secondly
, people may get a job in
this
area. Small businesses have an opportunity to expand globally and it grows the
overall
economy of the country. In the end , it helps in developing good
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between countries and it helps in intercontinental
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and peace. When countries are dependent upon one another's economic success after that armed conflict would be less likely. On the drawback, importing goods can have a bad effect on local culture. It can be seen in many countries,
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Japan.
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imported food has become more famous than traditional, local produce. eroding people's understanding of their traditional foods. A second serious drawback is pollution. If products are transported above thousands of miles by sea , road and air , it increases pollution from
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fumes To summary up, importing
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has both plus and minus
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but the merit
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downside
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the downside
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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