The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the differences
of
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in
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people
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living in
cities
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, towns, and rural
areas
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between 1995 and 2010. It highlights the based on
people
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who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia.
Overall
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, for 15 years, an average
number
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approximately
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60
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percent
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per cent
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of
people
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choose to live in urban
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. Meanwhile, the
people
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live
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who live
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in town are
quiet
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quite
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steady for both
people
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who were born in
Australian
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Australia
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and who were not. The
number
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of
people
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who live in rural
areas
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is decreasing significantly. In 1995,
people
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living in towns has the lowest
number
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compared to the
cities
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and rural
areas
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.
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, the data shows that rural
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are averagely populated by 35
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percent
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per cent
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in Australia. In 2010, the
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of
people
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who
live
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lived
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in the
cities
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remains
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remained
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high about
the
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an
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average
70
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of 70
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percent
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. The differences between
people
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who live in
cities
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and outside the
cities
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are remarkably high which shows
appproximately
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approximately
70
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percent
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per cent
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differences. The percentage of
people
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who live in rural
areas
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is the lowest.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, areas, number, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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