You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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Recent studies have shown that fewer
people
devote
time
to hobbies nowadays. In
this
article, I'm going to display my thoughts on why
this
is happenings and what effect it has on
people
and society. I believe adults are now working more hours a week than ever before, which includes weekends in some cases.
This
results in them having less
time
outside of their jobs, which they would spend
time
with their families/friends, and maintaining their homes. Technological advancements would
also
have a huge impact on
people
not taking part in hobbies now. Adults and children spend a large chunk of their
time
on social media, watching television and playing video games. If you were to look back 15-20 years ago,
people
would spend more
time
outdoors. Children would be playing outside most of the day with their friends, but the sad reality is that they now spend
time
sat
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indoors on mobile phones, iPads, and watching television.
As a result
of all of the above, the rate of obesity is rising more than ever before. With
people
becoming overweight, they are less likely to engage in sporting activities. The thought of going out to dinner, and scrolling on Instagram far
outweights
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outweighs
the idea of playing football with friends or joining a local netball team.
To conclude
; with
people
working more, spending
time
on social media
along with
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watching television and playing video games,
people
are spending less
time
in the outdoors and joining sports clubs and other hobbies.
As a result
, the nation is becoming more obese
overall
which makes the situation worse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deprive
  • leisure activities
  • harmful impacts
  • relieve stress
  • enhance productivity
  • boost creativity
  • foster social interactions
  • escape from daily routines
  • pursue one's interests
  • balance work and personal life
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