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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The given line graph demonstrates the tonnage of
goods
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 transported in the UK by different
transportation
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 modalities from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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, road
transportation
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 had the highest amount of
goods
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 each year, and all
kind
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 of methods increased moderately
besides
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 the railway only rose slightly. In 1974, the
transportation
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 of
goods
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 on
road
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the road
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 started at 70
million
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tones
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tonnes
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,
then
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 fluctuated at
this
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 level to 1986. Before it inclined exponentially between 1994 and 2002, it remained constant at just below 70
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in a period of 4 years.
The water
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Water
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 transport increased generally, except it
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dropped to 50
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 in 1998. After that year it grew gradually to well over 60
million
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tones
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tonnes
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.
Railway
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The railway
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 was
also
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 used for
goods
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transportation
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,
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apply
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 and started at40,
,
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apply
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 40
million
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tones
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tonnes
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 per year. There was a fluctuation between 1978 and 1998,
then
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 slowly increased and reached
to
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apply
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just over 40
million
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tones
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tonnes
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.
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,
pipeline
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the pipeline
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 was
other
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another
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 alternative way for
goods
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transportation
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, increased to 25
million
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tones
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 in 1082 and remained constant at that level, before it declined steadily to 20
million
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tones
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 and not changed for
next
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the next
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 8 years.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, transportation, million, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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