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A glance at the graphs reveals that japon population growth increased 2005. According to first graph, the society will be falling in 2055

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The provided bar graph illustrates information about the
number
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 of
marriages
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 and
divorces
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 rate by millions,
while
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 the bottom graph shows the marital
status
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 of Americans, which was divided into four different categories, namely never married, married, widowed and divorced in the USA over the 30-year period.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that the proportion of marriage
number
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 was higher than
divorces
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, Another interesting point is that during the downward trend of the
number
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 of
marriages
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 and
divorces
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, the ratio of the married population held the highest
status
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 in both particular years. As regards the
number
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 of
marriages
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 and
divorces
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,
marriages
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 witnessed 2.5
million
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 between 1970 and 1980,
while
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divorces
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 stood at 1
million
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 and increased to just under 1.5
million
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 which was roughly twice the time lower than
marriages
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. After 1970, both numbers decreased slightly, but the
number
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 of
marriages
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 fell more than
divorces
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 to 2
million
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 and 1
million
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 respectively. In terms of
the
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marital
status
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, there was a significant difference between the
number
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 of married and others in both years. In 1970, there was the highest ratio of the married population with 70
percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 marital
status
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 in 2000 accounted for just under 60
percent
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per cent
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. The
number
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 of divorced and never-married
number
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 rose to 20 and just below 10
percent
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per cent
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 respectively.
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