Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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some educationalists tend towards the viewpoint that every
child
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should be taught how to play a musical
instrument
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, I would have to support the idea that children are free to choose what they like to learn
besides
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at school. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that every
child
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should learn at least one musical
instrument
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. One of the main
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that music can bring more positive effects
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children’s development. Normally, parents are encouraged to
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unborn
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child
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to listen to music that
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child
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a child
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improve intelligence. Learning a musical
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instrument
in childhood not only brings some benefits of intelligence but
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get more skills
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as patience, concentration, etc.
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that, playing a musical
instrument
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is a good
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activity
to relax after school.
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, a
child
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who can play guitar or piano can be prioritized for a musical performance at school. When they get older, they have more advantages than others if they want to apply to a band.
On the other hand
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, I disagree with the viewpoint that every
child
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should know how to play a musical
instrument
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.
This
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is because each person has different
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characteristics
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and hobbies. People who enjoy music usually have open-minded, or imaginative,
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emotions
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. Children should choose what they like to learn by
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themselves
.
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,
although
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teaching a musical
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instrument
for
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every
childs
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child
can get benefits, I am convinced that children should
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more subjects
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on their hobbies, parents can consider that when
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make
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a
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decision
for
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children
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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