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People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People
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 are having more and more sugar-based
drinks
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 is becoming more widespread in many parts of the world these days.
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 essay will examine the causes
as well as
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 the solutions that could be taken to improve the situation. There are a variety of different causes for
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 matter.
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 with, the taste of sugar-based
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 is always more attractive than non-sugar
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 or mineral water, when
people
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 are feeling thirsty, they tend to choose sugar-based
drinks
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 to quench their thirst.
According to
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 research, quenching thirst accounts for 86% of the reasons why
people
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 use sugar-based
drinks
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.
This
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 kind of drink is becoming more popular nowadays with a lot of products
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 as milk tea, soda, juice, etc. Another contributing factor is the essential of
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 in daily meals, having meals with sugar-based
drinks
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 is a good way to boost their appetite. One good illustration of
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 is every party always has sugar-based
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, especially for children. Despite
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these circumstances, there are various measures that the
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governments
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 could take to solve the problems.
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, all
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sugar-based
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 should have a nutrition facts label.
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 action can bring clear information about nutrition
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 so that customers can make appropriate choices.
Secondly
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, the
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governments
government
 should interfere with
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 of sugar-based
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 on social media,
entertainment
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and entertainment
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 media, especially for children.
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, an advertisement about a new kind of milk tea on television has a recommendation about the quantity,
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 should be 1 to 2 cups per week. In conclusion, drinking a lot of sugar-based
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 is a big problem that affects
people
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 nowadays.
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, various actions can be taken to tackle the issue to reduce the effects.

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