Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Employers sometimes ask
people
applying for jobs for personal information
such
as their hobbies and interests or even
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if are
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they married or single. From my perspective,
this
information might be significant because you’ll know
this
person
,
his
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and his
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character well. Knowing your future employer’s passions,
hobbies
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and hobbies
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lifestyle is undoubtedly essential.
Moreover
, you will be able to draw a conclusion and estimate
person
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the person
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.
For instance
, if
person
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the person
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likes to spend time
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doing something useful
such
as self-development,
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or refining
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themselves at
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they will probably
going
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be going
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to be successful and responsible in their future job.
However
, if
person
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a person
the person
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gives a preference to do something futile or just doing nothing you’ll be able to understand that
this
person
is
inappropriate
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the inappropriate
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employer.
Furthermore
, by knowing their interests you will be able to comprehend
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whether are
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they disciplined or not.
However
, employees should observe subordination at
questions
. It is unlikely to ask about their own life, relationship, partner
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etc
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. I consider
,
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people
shouldn’t give a response to that kind of
questions
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question
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if they don’t want.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
who reckon that employers shouldn’t ask
questions
to
people
because it is insignificant and unnecessary. I cannot say that they are right, because somehow it is likely to know some rudimentary details about
people
.
People
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characteristics can display
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whether employer
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employer
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employers
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are
they
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responsible enough to cope with their work or not,
consequently
employer
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employers
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will be able
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all basic things about
person
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a person
the person
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.
Last
but not least, employers should ask
questions
to
people
in order to know them better and evaluate them as
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stuff
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staff
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,
however
, they should observe subordination in some
questions
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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