Due to advancement in technology, many companies now offer employees the option to do their jobs from home. do you think this is a positive oe negative development?

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Recent development in technology,
such
as video conferences,
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and
others
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online resources have changed the way of working. Nowadays, many organizations and private companies offer their worker to do their jobs from
homes
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.
According to
me,
this
is
positive
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development because it not only
spare
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time
but
also
save
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money.
To begin
with, doing jobs from residence save
time
for
others
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activities. To illustrate it, when employees need to travel
offices
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, it
take
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time
to reach
at
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distination
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destination
. If they have to
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their duties from home by using
advance
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technoologies
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technologies
like cell phones and laptops etc, it will provide them extra
time
to cook food and do some shopping.
For instance
, different colleges in Kasmir
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been providing distance education by uploading lectures at
insititute
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institute
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websites and
this
innovatives
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innovative
mood of education spare
time
for both students and teachers.
Thus
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online working is really magnanimous progress in
present
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era that makes things more
easiers
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easier
to use
extra
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the extra
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time
for
others
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responsibilities.
Moreover
,
this
improvement in technologies not only
provide
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provides
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financial assistance to company owners but
also
employees. To elaborate
it
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, if they need to travel daily to reach at
at
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their offices, it will cost
alot
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a lot
of money in the form of rent.
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Furthermore
, they will use electricity
such
as lights, fans and
inverter
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.
Then
how it is possible for
a
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organization to obtain profit
.
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These all expenditures can be excluded when working without moving to
working
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places.
Thus
working from houses is actually helpful to earn more profit. To put it in a nutshell I pen down saying,
due to
the innovation in technology, workers can perform their duties from
homes
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which have many significant impact to save money
as well as
precious
time
.

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