Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are controversial ideas about how
children
manage their free
time
.
While
letting them do whatever they like has some advantages, I believe that being engaged in an organization is more helpful. On the one hand,
children
managing leisure
time
by themselves has some pros.
This
helps them develop independence, self-control and
time
management skills, and it is
therefore
beneficial when they have to live alone. By letting them freely use their free
time
, they may respect their
time
and proactively prioritize things that are more important
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them.
In addition
, when
children
do things they find interesting or work on their own hobbies, they find their lives more enjoyable than being asked to follow the group.
For example
, some young people who like drawing
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can concentrate and hone their skills in their idle
time
, and they may become
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talented
artist
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in the future.
On the other hand
, it is perhaps even more important for
children
to be a member of an
organiztion
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organisation
in their spare
time
.
Firstly
,
groupworks
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group works
groupwork
teach them collaboration, leadership and communication skills which are extremely essential for their personal development in their adult lives.
Secondly
, social organizations
such
as charitable activities do
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jobs for society, being
volunteer
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in those groups can build
children
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kindness and compassion and they
therefore
probably become a good
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of society.
Finally
, these activities make
children
occupied, and they are not prone to
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involed
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involved
in social evils like drug abuse or spending their free
time
on
smart phones
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all day long. I remember attending the church choir when I was a
school girl
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, and
this
period taught me about the goodwill of contribution. In conclusion, I can understand why some parents give
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for
children
to use their idle
time
, but it seems to me that teamwork is more advantageous.
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