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The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the beginning.

The line graph illustrates that the amount of coffee sent abroad from Brazil, Colombia and Costa Rica between 2002 and 2012. A glance at the graph reveals that all of the exports reached a higher capacity than in the beginning.
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The chart below shows the quantity of
coffee
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 which was exported from different countries from 2002 to 2012.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that all countries gained an increase in exporting
coffee
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 over the period between 2002 and 2012. Another striking factor is that the most significant growth was recorded in Brazil. In 2002, Costa Rica had the highest figure in exporting
coffee
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 at 15
million
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.
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, it fluctuated over the period and reached 20
million
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 in 2012.
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, Brazil experienced a steady rise until
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a decline in 2008 at approximately 16%. After
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 off at a low point, it saw a rise in 2012 and became the highest at 25
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. One prominent feature of
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 date is Colombia had the smallest figure at 5
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 in 2002. There was
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 a surge until 2006
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 when about 14
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 kilograms of
coffee
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 was exported from Colombia.
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, the figure plunged until 2008 and
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 observed a dramatic increase in 2012, about 4
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 kilograms and 15
million
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 kilograms respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Illustrates
  • Amount
  • Exported
  • Abroad
  • Capacity
  • Trends
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Significant
  • Peaks
  • Troughs
  • Reasons
  • Climate
  • Demand
  • Trade policies
  • Compare and contrast
  • Fluctuations
  • Economic conditions
  • Agricultural developments
  • Unique elements
  • Production scale
  • Market strategy
  • Global coffee demand
  • Agricultural technology
  • International trade agreements
  • Competitiveness
  • Quality
  • Reputation
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