Children should play online games nowadays. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

Children

at

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between the age of 4

until

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18

they

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have to play

video

games

to

waste

their

time

in

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finding new

games

to play on.

Video

games

have purchased several new

games

for the

children

to play on.

This

essay will discuss the advantages and

the

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disadvantages

for

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children

to play

video

games

. First , there are some advantages for

children

to play

video

games

.

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, in

this

case

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its

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it's

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a

waste

of

time

for the

kids

to use their own device to play some new

games

.

Therefore

, in

this

way

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the

kids

will not disturb their

parents

while

they are doing some work. The

kids

could

also

learn some new techniques on how to play the

games

and

also

learn some new wordings from

this

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these

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games

.

Kids

between the age of 4

until

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18 they must have something to

waste

their

time

on

their

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are some new hints for the

kids

must learn how to solve it.

Children

likes

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to play sports

games

for example

shooting

games

or basketball

games

in

this

way they could learn

on

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how to play .

However

, there are some disadvantages for

children

to play online

games

.

First

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if the

children

keeps

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on playing for hours

in

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their device it

effects

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their eyes if the

children

keeps

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on playing for the whole day.

Secondly

, there are some bad things for the

kids

to learn

while

children

are playing

like

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for instance

there are some bad people to meet

while

the

kids

are playing, In

this

case

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their

parents

have to teach their babies not to create any group with other they meet when the

kids

are playing,

parents

have to put some rules in order not to do

this

thing anymore.

However

, there is one wrong way to do if the

kids

meets

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other people from

different

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a different

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country and

they

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join online

this

is a very bad thing to do because sometimes these people

gives

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them bad words and the

kids

don't have to learn these bad issues

while

the

kids

are playing.

To conclude

, babies must play

video

games

it

a

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waste

of

time

for the

kids

to play.

Video

games

are

famouse

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famous

all around the world.

Hopefully

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the

parents

could teach their

kids

in

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not to join online groups

while

the

kids

are playing.