Buying goods and services online is very popular and has many advantages, but it is not always safe to shop online. do you think the advantages gained from shopping online outweigh the disadvantages?

Globalization is emerging at a rapid rate and individuals are being more tech
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savvy
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savvy
, in
this
modernisation, doing online transactions for purchasing items and services are widely famous, which carries a plethora of pros
along with
a few cons of not being safe in
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online payments. I strongly believe
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outshines the
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against
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will be discussing in the looming paragraphs.
To begin
, window shopping is only possible
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improvisations and
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developments in technology. Individuals are used to
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websites,
therefore
they like to shop quickly, which enables them to save their precious time.
Furthermore
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along with
advancements, plenty of traders are entering
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the market and creating tough competition,
as a result
, it sets a breeding ground for finding better deals and exclusive offers by shoppers.
For instance
,
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multivendor websites are actively launching their exclusive offers to attract more customer base. Unlike
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crime
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rate is significantly increased, where online
frauds
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the major proportion of it. Certainly, with the rise of technology criminals found multiple ways to make people fool on online platforms with their fraudulent methods. To cite an example: It is common for mobile phones to receive an sms containing a link about something important and mostly old people become a victim of it; which is called a phishing attack. In a nutshell, purchasing goods and services online is widely
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and it does have
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disadvantages, but I believe
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the advantages
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are more, which is changing the world at a rapid rate.
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