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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The process given illustrates, how
electricity
Use synonyms
 is produced by geothermal energy.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are five main stages to making
electricity
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. First of all, the process begins with cold
water
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 pumping down into the ground and includes various processes
as well as
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 crossing
water
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 from hot rocks until the
electricity
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 is ready to be produced. Looking for more details, before the cold
water
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 is put into the injection well, to pass the geothermal zone, it is gone down for 4.5 km. The production of hot
water
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 is done and it goes up to be pumped into a condenser. after it has been changed into steam, it goes into a turbine which is powered by steam.
lastly
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, the generator is powered by the turbine and produces the essential
electricity
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 to be consumed.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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