The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

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The charts provide information about the

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spending of people on various needs in a European country in two different years. The

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expenditure on goods showed notable changes between the two periods, mainly in food, travel & transport, and luxury goods. A number of commodities and services represented an increasing trend of spending from 1958 to 2008. The housing portion rose significantly by 10% during the time period. Meanwhile, people's purchases of luxuries and travel and transportation doubled by 2008,

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about 17% each.

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, there are products for which purchasing has decreased in the target period. Food illustrated a distinct drop in the spending average, from 32% in 1958 to 12% in 2008. Clothing,

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, showed a slight change from 18% to 16% by the end of the period. Expenditures on entertainment

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presented a decreasing trend in 2008 of about half the spending of 1985.

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The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The gap between rich and poor is growing. What problems does this create? What can be done to tackle this.

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In today’s society people tend to buy many things and throw them away even though they can still be used. What are some causes of this behaviour? What are some effects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.