The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.

The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the Great Britain from 1984 to 2000.
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The line chart given illustrates a comparison of the proportion of people who went to the cinema in Great Britain in terms of their life between 1984 and 2000. From an
overall
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perspective, it is evident that the percentages for
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participation among all age groups showed an upward trend over the period shown.
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, the figure for those among 15-24 years old was highest throughout the period supplied. In 1984, participation at the cinema among the 15-24 age group was the highest, at around 18%. The data on the 7-14 and 25-35 years old were notably lower, at 10% and approximately 4%, respectively.
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, attendance among those aged over 35 accounted for the lowest percentage, at 1%. From 1984 to 2000, there was a steady increase in the attendance of the over 35s to somewhere in the vicinity of 14% in 2000. After many fluctuations, in 2000, around 32% of those aged 7-14 went to the cinema. The 25-35 maturity group
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witnessed a fluctuating rise in its figure to just over 30%
at the end
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of the period. After reaching a peak of 58% in 1999, the data on young people in the 15-24 youth group fell to around 55% in the final year.
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