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ar chart illustrates the different forms of gross domestic product (IT and Service industry) in the united kingdom from 1992 to 2000. These values are calculated in percentages

ar chart illustrates the different forms of gross domestic product (IT and Service industry) in the united kingdom from 1992 to 2000. These values are calculated in percentages
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The supplied bar chart gives data on the proportion of Gross Domestic Products from the IT and
service
industry
 over an 8-year period (1992-2000). The data are measured in percentages. A glance at the graphs reveals that the rate of both the IT and
service
 industries increased during the given time span.
However
, the IT
industry
 experienced a higher rise compared to the other
industry
. As the diagram suggests, at the beginning of the period (1992), the GDP from
service
 and IT was 4 and just over 6%, respectively. Within the time span of 2 years, both sectors uplifted a very small proportion, around 2%.
At the end
 of the year 1996, the amount of difference in the revenue product from IT and
service
 decreased, and both got between 6% and 8%.
Whereas
 the IT
industry
 experienced a small decline, to less than 8%, in 1996, still remained higher than the other
industry
 by the end of the given period.
In contrast
, regarding the following 4 years, it is seen that the two components experienced an upward trend to over 14% and 8% showing that the proportion of the production by the IT
industry
 was well above the
service
. The rate of production for the IT section
,
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 approximately doubled from 8% to nearly 16% in the
last
 year. Though, the
service
industry
 climbed mildly to a little more than 8%, which is quite a low growth, comparatively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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